Thursday, October 11, 2007


Lands NOMB in the hospital with the shakes and heart popping out of the chest. Luckliy, if you go to Jefferson, you can still get a hospital bed. NOMB finally finds an upside to fatal shootings

A 37-year-old man died in a hail of gunfire in the 2100 block of Erato Street on Wednesday just after 11 a.m., New Orleans police said.

The man was identified as Donnell Gray, 37, of New Orleans, Police Department spokeswoman officer Jonette Williams said.

Brenda Maccarthy took some creative liberities with this one. Let's look at the verbiage.
Crime scene technicians snapped photos and took notes as Gray lay facedown. He wore jeans and a black shirt, and a baseball cap fell inches from his face. Fluorescent cones marked bullet casings.
Narrative Arc
Nearby, an NOPD chaplain held a broken umbrella aloft, shading two weeping relatives from the beating midday sun.
A man who identified himself as a relative tried to make his way past the police tape several times to no avail. He said he wanted to see Gray one last time and pay his final respects.

Moralistic Ending Without Editorial Commentary
Dejectedly, the man walked away and made the sign of the cross with his hand, bringing two fingers to his lips. With tears in his eyes, he turned his back and walked away.
He muttered: "It's part of the game."

The lull in violent crime has given our Times-Picayune writers with time to let thier literary chops shine.


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